You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel . Write a letter to the hotel making the arrangement. Let them know when you will be arriving and leaving, what type of rooms you would like, and ask them how much the weekend will cost. Also enquire about activities and places of interest near the hotel .
Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is James Stockwood. I am arranging, with my wife and daughter, a family weekend holiday. I am elated to share the momentous news of picking your seaside hotel as our desired accommodation for
this
trip. The reason I am getting in contact is to make the reservation and gather info on available activities.
My family and I would like to arrange a reservation from November 22nd to December 11th. We will be arriving late on the 22nd and leaving early on the 11th. It will require a family suite for three people, preferably with a big restroom and a California king bed; if that is
not available, one queen-size bed and a super single would be suitable as well.
One of the reasons we are thrilled with your hotel is that, as we heard from a couple of friends, you offer a diving experience, even for kids. I am not certain that is
really the case, if it is I would appreciate tips on how we should prepare ourselves for that. Another thing is, I would like the itinerary of your city tourism.
The last
thing is, I would like to know how much this
whole experience would cost. Perhaps there is a promotional package price for situations where we get to do all those activities.
Best Regards,
Daniel.Submitted by Danarvelini
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single clear idea. The paragraph discussing arrival and room preferences slightly merges two topics (room preference and activities). It's better to separate them for clarity.
task achievement
Although the concluding statement is well done, consider adding a polite phrase to prompt a reply, such as 'I look forward to your prompt response.'
task achievement
Maintain clarity throughout the letter. Be consistent with dates and names to avoid confusion. The letter contained conflicting information - a duration from November 22nd to December 11th is not a weekend. Likewise, the signature mentions 'Daniel' instead of the introduced 'James Stockwood.' These inconsistencies can be misleading.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite