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Should the government fund the education and healthcare system? What is your opinion?

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In recent years, the authorities in some
countries
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 have financed the schooling and medical care of their
citizens
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.
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, it motivates and supports the
citizens
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 that need them, especially the poor.
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 essay will be discussing the reasons for
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 decision as well as my opinion.
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, in
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 like USA and Uk, the government should provide educational support,
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 helps the young ones to have access to school and partake in various activities in them, that help in their developmental stage. The support is mostly from adolescents to adulthood-where they are now fully grown and can provide for themselves.
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, some developing
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 as Nigeria, Togo and South Africa, provide free high school only and create a scheme for scholarships they are all done for the betterment of the community and the people.
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, the healthcare system has a very important role to play because the services are needed by every individual on earth, from infancy to late adulthood.
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, more funds should be ventured into
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 aspect because when the
citizens
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 have to pay less or receive free treatment, they term to visit the hospital on a regular basis. Some
countries
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 have health insurance, whereby individuals can pay less dan 10-20% for whatever treatment is provided. Whereas other developing
countries
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 decide to provide free medical care for under 5 years and free maternity treatment, which helps to reduce the rate of infant and maternal morbidity and mortality. A recent study has shown that
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 method has reduced the rates from 80% to 30%, which indicates that the scheme has been effective. In conclusion,I think the government should support the
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, both in the education and medical system by assigning and supervising the authorities in charge of the different schemes for it to be effective.
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