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Nowadays many companies have manufacturing facilities in different countries. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages?

#companies #facilities #countries #development
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In many societies,
companies
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 have
factories
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 in various
countries
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. Most
of
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companies
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companies'
company's
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factories
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 are located in undeveloped or developing
countries
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 like the People's Republic of
China
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,
Kingdom
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the Kingdom
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 of Thailand and India.
It
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 is because placing
factories
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 in
the
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undeveloped or developing
countries
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 allows them to recruit a labourer easily.
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 manufacturing facilities in different
countries
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 can
make
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companies
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to
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reduce
the
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costs.
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, there are several advantages and disadvantages for
companies
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 to have
factories
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 in different
countries
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.
First,
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for advantages,
companies
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 may recruit a labourer easily. Most of
developed
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the developed
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country
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's citizens
does
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do
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 not want to work in
factories
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.
That is
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 why developed
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country's
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country
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companies
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 like
an
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apply
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Samsung and Apple are moving their manufacturing facilities to developing
countries
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. Samsung have
a
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factories
a factory
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factories
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 in
the
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Vietnam and India, Apple have
a
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factories
a factory
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factories
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 in the People's Republic of
China
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 and
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
China
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 (Taiwan).
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for disadvantages,
companies
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 may be
challenge
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in
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by
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 the lack of quality problem.
Products
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 produced from different
countries
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has
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have
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 a lot of problems, like
an
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apply
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inferior
goods
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.
Products
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 produced from
country
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 A might not have
an
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apply
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inferior
goods
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 but
products
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 made from
country
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 B can have
an
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apply
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inferior
goods
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 issues.
This
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 situation occurs
due to
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lack
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a lack
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 of labourer's technique.
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, when Samsung moved
their
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its
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 smartphone
produce
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production
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 line from
China
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 to Korea,
inferior
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the inferior
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goods
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 problem
had
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declined
raplidly
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rapidly
 in 2014.
To sum up
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, there are several advantages and disadvantages to
companies
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have
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having
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 manufacturing
factories
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 in different
countries
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. Businesses can find the best way to make
best
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the best
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 quality
products
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 and expand widely.
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