In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasises that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

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of advertising
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customer attention by
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their
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how
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and new stuff better than competitor's
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products
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you to buy in some way. In
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of
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positive and negative development based on my opinions.
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competition
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thier
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relative products field. If the company want to increase circulation, Good advertising will attract
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ball from people.
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their
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manufacturer
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