As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Businesses
are established with
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motive and their activities are directed towards earning money. Meanwhile, these
businesses
also
have
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social responsibility towards the community where they exist. I personally believe that
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corporate houses should be aware
about
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their roles and responsibilities towards
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society
. The organization exist in
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environment
that is
equally shared by the people and
society
. The existence of
businesses
has various impacts on the environment causing degradation,
pollutions
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pollution
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and so on.
This
is why
businesses
should
also
focus on their responsibilities towards
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society
.
For instance
, the manufacturing industries and factories are found making
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investment
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investments
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in filtration equipment for the harmful gases emitted during the process of production
such
that its impact on the surrounding is reduced.
Secondly
, the corporate houses are built
in
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land which
were
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previously used for either cultivation for earning
of
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the family or
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open areas for fresh air.
Although
this
has brought development around but
also
resulted in unemployment
to
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those who survived on the income earned from the
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of
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land.
Therefore
,
businesses
could
also
provide
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employment opportunities to the affected people to help with their living. Admittedly, companies are built up
to
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with
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that ultimately
result
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in earning profit and they have played
crucial
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role
for
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infrastructural developments and advancement.
However
, they should be concerned about the effects they have left
in
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the
society
and surroundings they exist in and spend
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part of their excess income towards their corporate social duties.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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