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You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened, and that you want your money back. Things to include: - Facts. You need to be concise but explain what happened. - Polite. No one responds to insults. - Outline what you wish from this. What do you want to happen? - Firmness. You want to be taken seriously.

#restaurant #manager #money #facts #insults #outline #firmness
Dear Sir/Madam I am writing
this
 letter to express my disappointment about the service we were offered at your restaurant. I regret to choose your plan to dine out with my family on the occasion of their anniversary. We had been in contact with the manager as we had planned
surprise
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to
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 our parents. We reached the restaurant at around 6:00 PM in the evening as per the plan. The decorations and arrangements were not done yet. We had to wait for half an hour.
In addition
, we complained about the fact and the way staff responded to us was very surprising. They even responded that if we are satisfied, we may go to any other place.
Furthermore
, the food we had chosen from the menu was not available.
Also
, I guess the restaurant must comply with minimum sanitation
standard
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 because I found some hair on our food. Because of
this
, we were not willing to pay our bills but the cashier threatened to call
police
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 and had to pay to avoid any
further
 disappointment.
This
 experience was entirely unacceptable and I would like to request you for
the
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 full refund. I would
also
 suggest not
to promise
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 good customer service if you are not able to. I look forward
for
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 your prompt response Sincerely,
Joana
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Joanna
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