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Government installed surveillence are normal in today’s society Some people believe that surveillance cameras are unethical and immoral. What are possible pros and cons of surveillance cameras.

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surveillence
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surveillance
camera's
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 is a good initiative taken by the government. Some people think That installing cameras are unethical and immoral because of some reasons. But in my opinion, it is a good step to install surveillance cameras in
todays
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 society. They will help in
detection
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the detection
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 of crime, monitoring activities and in making decisions related to crimes.
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, they cannot stop the crime but can help in gathering the
evidences
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evidence
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 and arriving at
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 decisions. there are some cons as well in which the main reason for them being unethical and immoral is
invasion
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an invasion
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 of privacy. they make people conscious regarding their tasks and work.
i
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 think it would be unethical or morally incorrect if cameras are installed in
someone
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 house specifically in bedrooms and bathrooms.
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