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Disrance-learning programs cannot bring the benefit as attending college or university. Agree or disagree?

#programs #benefit #college #university
It is often claimed that studying online cannot bring
profits
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take
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 part in schools, colleges or
universties
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universities
. Most
of
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pupils
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the pupils
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 do not want to learn without teachers because they have more freedom at
home
 compared to
the
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colleges and schools. It is true to say that
the
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studying online cannot be of use. I definitely disagree with
this
 statement. In recent years, teenagers get
mor
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more
efreedom
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freedom
 at their
home
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homes
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 when their parents
at
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are at
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 work. Because they are alone at
home
 without grandparents.
To
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 my way of thinking being with the grandparents and listening to their
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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 are so indispensable
thing
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things
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 for their life.
Furthermore
, when
children
at
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are at
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home
 their parents order
to
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them to do
houseworks
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housework
house works
. After working they will
tired
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,
as
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and as
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aresult
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a result
 they will not want to do
homeworks
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homework
. So studying offline is very significant to
pupils
. In recent decades, a lot of people get own phones. Almost everybody has
own
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their own
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 phone. They can study online. Two years ago we
also
 studied distance-learning programs. Yet, it seemed to me that studying at
colleges
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college
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 is more beneficial for
children
 to attend
the
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apply
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university. But
children
 who have
own
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their own
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phone
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phones
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 want to play video games rather than
studying
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study
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.
However
, some
pupils
 do not have phones. While other
pupils
 are studying online, they cannot learn.
Then
 they get more backwardness. To
way
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 of my conclusion, I reiterate my opinion by saying that studying online is not beneficial for
children
 as attending classes. I disagree with distance-learning programs. In my
opinion
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 everyone thinks like me.
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