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Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#think #information #advice #people #internet #books
Nowadays, there are many sources
where
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 can be used to collect
information
 or get help about a
concern
. Some
people
 believe that reaching
to
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out to
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people
 and
ask
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asking
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 them about
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their
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concern
 would be better than going on
web
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the web
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 or
read
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reading
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books
 and
search
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searching
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 for anything someone want
ot
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to
 know about. In my opinion, the use of
internet
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the internet
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 or
revieiwing
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revising
books
 may help more than only talking to
people
.
People
 usually share
information
 in the regard to their
experience
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experiences
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. And
this
 sometimes is not enough to get the answer or the data they are looking for.
Moreover
, unfortunately, many
individuasl
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individuals
 provide wrong
information
 just to avoid the embarrassment that could happen if they are not well informed about a
concern
. As result,
this
 could lead to misinformation and sometimes may harm others. 
One there
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On their
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 side of the argument, many agree that using
internet
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the internet
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 or reading
books
 will provide more help in finding the answer to any question or
concern
.
Furthermore
, the
internet
 is a huge database to numerous
information
 that can be accessed by anyone
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at and
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and
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any
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 anytime when
internet
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the internet
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available
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is available
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.
Also
, one more plus point is that
internet
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the internet
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 is
a
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apply
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faster and more reliable. Reading
books
 as well
,
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apply
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 can be more effective due to
books
 being published after a thorough revision
to
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of
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 the
information
 inside
it
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them
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. 
In other words
,
internet
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the internet
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 and
books
 are a collection of
information
 and data In a nutshell, it is debated
between
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apply
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wether
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whether
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 to speak to
people
 to gather
information
 or use the
internet
 and
books
 for it. I agree that
internet
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the internet
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 and
books
 are more effective and precise in comparison than just listening to
people
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people's
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opinion
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opinions
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.
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