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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students do not respect their teachers as much as they did in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

#students #respect #teachers #support
Not as a rule, but while many people in society believe that nowadays
students
 value their
teachers
 and they
respect
 them, other groups in society say and believe that young people do not
respect
 their
teachers
 as much as they used to. Yet for some reason I lean towards the
second
 group and I will explain my thoughts in detail in the paragraph below.
Firstly
, when comparing past and present learning systems, there are so many different ways to learn today.
Therefore
, I strongly believe that
this
 is the most effective reason for
students
 to change their thoughts and behaviours towards their
teachers
.
In particular
, technology is a prime example
as
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 a different way of learning something. In the past, it was difficult to find any information, you had to ask some expert
of
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 a subject,
lecturer
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 or go to a library and find a real book and spend time searching for the
knowledge
 in a book.
However
, if you want to get
knowledge
 lately, you can use the internet so that you can access the
knowledge
 via computer or smartphone in
this
 way in minutes.
In addition
, when you press the Ctrl and F
button
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 on the keyboard you can find everything, whatever you are looking for in an e-book or article with keywords. Albeit, Accessing
the
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knowledge
 rapidly affect the communication between
teachers
 and
students
as a result
 of
the
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saving time and
reach
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the
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knowledge
 fastly thanks to technology. Due to
such
 reasons,
students
 may feel insecure about the know-how level of
teachers
 and their
respect
 for them may decrease.
Secondly
, Changing cultures with globalization. Some cultures carry about
to
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appreciation and others carry about discipline or some of them carry about
to be
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 hardworking. It’s about
the
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merging personal characteristics, I define a culture
this
 way but cultures start dying with globalization. All over the world use social media platforms for sharing something, and
learning
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 new things.
Although
 globalization
soundslike
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sounds like
a nice ring to it, young people start forgetting basic social rules
such
 as being disciplined and respecting their
teachers
. Expressly,
students
 in these times care about not respecting and behaving undisciplined towards their
teachers
 by mocking others (
classmate
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classmates
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 or lecturers) and consuming communication with each other quickly on
a
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big online platforms like TikTok, Instagram or Facebook. To conclude, children do not
respect
 their
teachers
 as much as they used to, because
teachers
 are not as essential as they were a few decades ago for children to access
the
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information.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Societal values
  • Student-centered learning
  • Authority
  • Respect
  • Technology
  • Expectations
  • Discipline
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