Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The phenomenon of the key to
success
in life has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
this
issue in question may be, I personally believe that how much
success
depends on the level of risks you take. On one hand, some people think that a detailed
plan
is the only path to
success
.
For example
, someone like to map a schedule and follow it to act every day. The schedule should be able to make his time
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distributed in each field efficiently(self-learning, job, friend, family and health). After
few
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decades, he may get a crucial position in his company
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CEO.
Therefore
, some folk spend a lot of time and energy on schedule
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and
execute
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.
On the other hand
, I believe that it does not matter how specific a
plan
is, there is always a risk that things do not according to the
plan
.
For instance
, there is a promotion opportunity appeal, the person who can get a contract with a corporation can get
this
chance. There is
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one hundred
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of guarantee for getting a contract with the company would
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a success
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success
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.
However
, if you want to
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,
this
is your best option. Similar
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exist surrounding us daily,
hence
I believe that no risk no
success
. Under
this
line of thinking, It seems to me that whether you
plan
your future and proceed, risks always exist, but it
also
means you have a chance to succeed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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