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News media are important in modern society. Why are they so important? Is their influence generally positive or negative?

#news #media #society #influence
New media has occupied an important place
in
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internet
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. Through
News
 media,
people
 be able to keep up with current events and issues. I personally believe that there are both positive and negative impacts of
news
 on
people
.
News
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 could be helpful for
people
 to study new things daily. That could develop an open and critical mind for
people
 to have self-judgment. As citizens of a country, they could be aware of their country's economic situation,
environment
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the environment
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 of society, or public
institution
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institutions
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 which are very well provided through
news
 media.
In addition
, global events could
also
be easily release
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 through the
news
.
People
 have abilities to gain
more
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clear information
of
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 what issues the whole world might
facing
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such
 as climate change, global warming,
over population
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overpopulation
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. Etc. Positive effects could be
shows
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 on
people
be
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 allowed to have a broader understanding of local, national and international affairs. Young generations could be
having
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a
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conscious of aware problems. Some
people
 could
be interest
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 in search more details data
of
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 the problem. To have a more
However
, nowadays most
of
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news
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the news
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 has shifted to several fewer essential problems. Most
of
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young
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the young
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people
be
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 attracted by celebrities’ private
news
 or
entertainments
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 development. There is a
significant
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 decreasing number of
people
 be
truly
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concern
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 about problems.
This
 could
be result
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 a serious
consequence
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consequences
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.
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