Many companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think this is good for the world of sports, while others think there are disadvantages of this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some
people
believe that
sponsorship
in sports, as a method of advertising, can have negative consequences, while others believe it is positive. I believe that negative consequences can arise from
this
trend,
however
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it is up to the sporting teams and
events
to ensure the companies that sponsor them are moral and ethical and
the
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products they sell do not have negative consequences on society.
Firstly
, without
sponsorship
, many sporting competitions and
events
could not operate. Large sporting
events
,
such
as the FIFA World Cup or the Olympics, require millions of dollars to organise and coordinate, and sponsors provide a lot of
this
much needed
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money. If there were no sponsors, the price of a spectator ticket would be extremely high as
this
would be the only revenue to cover the costs of the event, and
as a result
, many
people
could not afford to attend, which may leave the event organisers facing bankruptcy. On a smaller scale, many local children’s sporting
events
and teams rely on local businesses for
sponsorship
.
For example
, when I was young, a local business supplied my
football
team with jerseys and advertised their name and logo on the front of them. Without
this
sponsorship
, my
football
club would not have been able to afford new
football
jerseys each year for the players.
However
, there are some disadvantages which may occur when large sporting
events
use
sponsorship
from companies that produce products which have a negative impact on
people
and society,
such
as alcohol and tobacco companies. When young
people
are exposed to certain advertising, they can easily develop a positive association with those products and start to use them. Imagine how many young
people
could be influenced
through
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watching the World Cup
football
competition. In conclusion,
sponsorship
in sports can have both positive and negative outcomes,
however
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it is up to the sporting teams and
events
to make sure that the sponsors they use will not have a negative influence on
people
and society.
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