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If we want to save the future of the planet, we will have to drastically change our way of life. What is your opinion?

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Waste of natural
resources
 and unneeded material consumption
has
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have
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 increased in recent years. which caused the concept of protecting the earth to enter my mind. Even while more people are becoming aware of the problem, they still don't know how to put fresh solutions into action to rescue the earth. I utterly "Agree" with the assertion, and I'll go over every detail to support my position.
First
 off, as is common knowledge, population growth is the primary cause of the world's issues in the food and job sectors.
However
, the government has started a process to manage the human ratio with the use of commercials, items like condoms, plan B medications, and the phrase "Hum do Hamre do," which implies there should only be two children in each family and no more. The
second
 thought that came to me was the abuse of natural
resources
.
For instance
, in the modern period, everyone possesses a car, which has led to increased traffic as well as increased gas use. A
second
 point is that while buying a car is not a big deal, it is wasteful for two people to commute from the same home to the same area in separate cars. In conclusion, everyone must take action to save our specific
resources
 to survive on a future Earth. We shouldn't waste any of the
resources
 we now have, and
to begin
 the process, we must raise awareness of the issue among people.
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