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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Our environment consists of land, air, water, animals and
plants
. There are many natural and man-made problems which endanger our environment.
However
, some believe that
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 of plant and animal species
have
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 a major effect on nature while others believe that it is not. All living creatures have their own purpose and effects on earth. The importance of some species we already have discovered while others we are yet to find. And
loss
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the loss
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 of any of these living species will have
their
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an
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 effect on
earth
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the earth
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 which can be either negative or positive
first
for
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,for
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disappearance
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the disappearance
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 of carnivores from a forest will lead to
birth
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the birth
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 of large amounts of
non carnivores
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.
This
 will lead to
instability
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the instability
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 of the forest habitats.
Moreover
,
loss
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the loss
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 of certain types of
plants
 means that we might be losing an important source of medicine. While
loss
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the loss
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 of living things
are
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is
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 becoming an issue to nature, some believe that there are worse problems than that which people need to concentrate on. One important
such
 issue is
the
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global warming.
This
 is entirely a man-made problem, which in turn will affect all
plants
 and animals and
also
 the land.
In addition
, air land and water pollution from factories and vehicles
also
has
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 major effects on
earth
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the earth
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 in a negative manner.
Therefore
, in my opinion, I believe that there are more important environmental problems that we need to work on than
extinction
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the extinction
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 of
plants
 and animals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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