Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?

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The world has turned into a dangerous place for

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species of creatures and due to a number of

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they encounter risks which cause

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of their

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. The

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why they come across

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about their

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extinction

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possible

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mentioned problem.

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with, global warming has been the most crucial effect on the beasts which face

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, polar bears the beast has lived in

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can not find to sustain their life owing to melting

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reason which

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to die numerous

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up of natural sources due to overusing. To illustrate, in today's world

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the huge improvements in technological

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fields

, humankind has reached the opportunity of hunting by using

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dreadful

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as fishing

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which leads to

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vast amounts of

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, a number of challenges which

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been created by humanity like green gases and using

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, cause

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extinctions

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of specific creatures.

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, there might some

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to prevent passing species

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as diminishing the gas

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emissions

and creating territories where the

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endangered

animals

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can live.

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of all, by executing some restrictions

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factories which lead to air pollution and global

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, might supply a maintainable nature for

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way not only does provide pure fields for

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people can benefit from it.

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for

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particular

animals

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which are almost extinct, may determine specific areas or parks.

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, to resolve these difficulties

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solutions

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cited above can apply. To conclude, there are

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to rescue

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number of living beings which have been faced with getting

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disappeared

. The

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ways to save

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are finding

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convenient

areas to live these beasts and banning emissions.

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, the

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cause

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problem are exhausting the sources and global warming. It seems to me that

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resolving these issues can create an

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appropriate

territory to live

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more than we have lived.

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Topic Vocabulary:

species extinction
endangered animals
biodiversity
habitat loss
deforestation
urbanization
poaching
illegal wildlife trade
climate change
pollution
conservation efforts
legislation
enforcement
human overpopulation
sustainable development
responsible consumption
education
awareness programs
protected areas
wildlife reserves
international cooperation
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