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Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely acknowledged that with the development of technology and globalisation, the internet, as a new invention in the 20 th century is becoming very populous in
people
's life. Many
people
 think that it can bring some negative effects and other
people
 are against
this
 idea. I strongly believe that social networking is very useful for all
people
 and I will support
this
 view with arguments in the following paragraphs. Undoubtedly, it is true that we enable to watch a lot of changes and information through social networking
such
 as telegram Facebook Instagram and so on.
In other words
, these things can very easy
people
's lifestyles.
In addition
,
such
 sites are a means for
people
 to have a meaningful and enjoyable time with their friends, family members or other
people
.
For example
, when I come across some bad situation , I prefer to watch videos , and my favourite movies and chat with my friends on these sites .
This
 can help to reduce stress and pressure.
On the other hand
 , there are several both pros and cons factors in social networking.
Likewise
,
people
 face both good and bad things during using it, and , in turn, an irresistible urge appears in them.
This
 can affect their life not only academically but
also
 physically and socially too. To sum up, taking everything into consideration
although
 there are several disadvantages of using social media for all
people
, I firmly believe that these cannot outweigh their advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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