Some people buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having large number of toys ?
It is true that some individuals purchase their sons and daughters
a
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apply
hundreds
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hundred
toys
to play with , and though Change preposition
of toys
this
essay is mostly beneficial, there are also
some negative aspects that will also
be considered.
One of the first
benefits of such
a measure is that if people
buy a lot of cars , dolls and other toys
, children
's thinking will improve. As a result
, children
's interest in the world increases. This
would mean that children
create their fantastic universe . For example
, if you gift models of heroes to your children
, little ones will be Add an article
a hero
the hero
hero
in their world. Another advantage would be that Fix the agreement mistake
heroes
children
will be Add an article
a collector
collector
who Fix the agreement mistake
collectors
colect
a lot of interesting Correct your spelling
collect
toys
. It is often the case that if children
have two of the same toy , they can exchange with
their friends for another toy. Which Correct pronoun usage
it with
increase
the business ability of Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
children
. Then
, if children
are elder, they will be businessmen.
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the children
Nevertheless
, there are disadvantages to such
a solution. First
and foremost, when people
buy a lot of toys
to
Change preposition
for
children
, they will get used to it . That is
, even when children
grow up, they will play with toys
. As a
result
they do not want to break up from their Add a comma
,result
toys
. In addition
, buying too many toys
hurt people
's family finances . As a result
, families become poorer . Beyond that children
used
to receiving gifts from their parents every day. Parents may not always have enough money to Add a missing verb
are used
shopping
.
In conclusion, it has enough benefits and drawbacks which some Replace the word
shop
people
buy lots of toys
to
their Change preposition
for
children
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