Many animals are being hunted to the brink of extinction in order to fulfill the demand and greed of mankind for decorative purposes as well as for other reasons, such as traditional medicine. How can this issue be tackled?

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, poaching has become
global
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cencern
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concern
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and is the main problem, which is being faced by most
of
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nations
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across the world due to various reasons. We need to take
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immediate action in order to tackle
this
issue.
First
of all, many
animals
are being hunted by poachers because of
huge
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the huge
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demand for not only their leather but animal parts
also
.
Firstly
, the main reason behind
this
phenomenon is
human
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motto indeed.
Consequently
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mjority
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majority
of the various species around the globe is going to be
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brink of extinction.
Secondly
, it is an irrefutable fact that some
animals
are merely hunted because of decorative
purpose
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purposes
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, and medical treatments as well. In
addtion
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addition
, these creatures got a huge demand in
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black market for their antlers,claws, nails and tusks eventually.
For instance
, a recent article revealed that 70 Per cent of beasts have
alomst
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almost
entered into endangered list due to poaching.
On the other hand
, it is a
resposibility
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responsibility
to save
animals
for not only individuals but enforcement agencies
also
.
In addition
,
government
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must create
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awareness programs, which will enhance knowledge
will
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lead
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positive
out come
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in
the
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society.
Moreover
,
government
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need to
annouce
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announce
some
confiend
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confined
area, which was restricted
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outsiders, for these beasts. In fact, forest department staff and some officials need to be deployed at
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forest
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forests
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to monitor
health
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the health
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of the species on
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a regualar
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regualar
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regular
basis is
only
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way to stop the poachers.
For instance
, developed nations have developed restricted areas for these creatures, and a team of doctors
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always
keep
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an eye on these
animals
. To sum up, both government and individuals need to support the campaigns against
the
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animal hunting, and people must
aware
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of
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the
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animal
exinction
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extinction
is
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as
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only
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the only
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way to tackle
this
issue.
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