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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Other believe they should be free to work in any country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
It is nowadays considered that professionals
such
 as engineers or
scientist
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 should
remains
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 in
their
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countries
on
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 which they received their grassroots educations.
However
, some
others
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 people think that there should not be
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a restriction
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restriction
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restrictions
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 for
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a high
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high
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 qualified
person
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people
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 to move to another
country
 as far as there is
necessity
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. In my opinion,
on
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this
 context of globalization, international exchange and
skill sharing
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 among professionals should be encouraged despite a brain drain that should be controlled. In
this
 essay, I will explain why qualified workers should remain in their home
countries
 and later discuss the reasons why they should be free to work anywhere they like
to
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. The development of any nation should be sustained by
their
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trained people from their universities and companies. Losing qualified
laborers
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 will not only affect the economical growth of a
country
 but
also
 will affect the quality of the future generation.
Nevertheless
,
due to
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the lack of good policies mostly in developing
countries
 and
low
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 level of lifestyle make good workers
to
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move to other
countries
 where they can find more affordable conditions. Regarding the reason that should lead professionals to stay in their territories of origin, I would notice the patriotism that should be included
on
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 the education of all citizens.
Besides
, it is clearly stated that nobody else than the inhabitants of a
country
 would be able to develop it. In Conclusion, the mobility of highly skilled
worker
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workers
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 is a
double-edge
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 sword with a number of benefits as well as many adverse consequences. Even though the economical growth of every
country
 depends on its capacity to provide good human resources, their right to travel or to work wherever they prefer should not be reconsidered
by
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 any reason
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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