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Learning at university would be more effective if men and women were educated separetely. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #men #women
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University education should not only give some information, but it should
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 provide vision to
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. Some
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 think that separating classrooms based on
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' gender would be more effective. I quite disagree with
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 argument. Nowadays, universities are very diverse places where
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 get educated. It is advantageous to improve vision. Meeting different
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 of nationalities could
people
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 become more open-minded. Just like ethnic groups, there are lots of
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. Having time with different
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 of
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 could develop personal skills,
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 as communication. Most problems could solve if
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 communicate well. Separating men and women is preventing the connection between them.
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, assuming and classifying
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 as men and women is sexist behaviour in
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 century.
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, which class do transgender
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 go to? There are more than 2
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 anymore. If universities classify
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'
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, there should be lots of individual classrooms.
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, there is not enough example that separating
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 are beneficial.
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, if we search about the best 500 universities in the world, we see that all of them (probably) have mixed classrooms. Whole schools on that list have different
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 of education ways but any of them isn'
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 related to
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' gender because someone's gender is not a fence for others. In conclusion,
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 should develop their personalities through each other. Separating them could be pretty harmful because if they don'
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 meet different
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 of
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, they couldn'
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 understand the others. Humankindkind horrifies by what they don'
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 know. We should try to accept each other with all of our differences.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • single-gender education
  • coeducational
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • social dynamics
  • learning styles
  • cognitive differences
  • participation rates
  • diverse workplaces
  • educational outcomes
  • psychological implications
  • empirical evidence
  • inclusivity
  • reinforcement of gender roles
  • gender-segregated
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