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some people think that robots are very important to humans future development while others think they are dangerous and have negative effects on society . discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed that robotic machinery is a vital part of technological development
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 others think that it can have destructive effects on society. I strongly agree with the idea that
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 machine is
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 of the finest advances which is created in
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 era
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 its brilliant accuracy and
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 speed. On
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 hand,
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 portion of the population believes that robots will be a burden to our nation as the rates of unemployment will increase.
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 people would
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it would level up the laziness, exhaustion and fatigue among individuals
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,
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 invention lacks any emotional support, it does only what it has given a command to do.
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, its production is way too expensive
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 its maintenance
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 costs huge sums of money.
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, a study in the UK suggests that
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 total cost from its material to creation would cost around 2 million dollars which covers almost half of the budget.
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 hand there are many disadvantages of a robotic machine,
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,
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 is equipped with wonderful features.
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 automated machine performs tasks in an efficient and productive manner as compared to humans.
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, it can perform tasks in an unsafe environment where potential risks to human life are seen.
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, during a fire outbreak in a company robots helped to evacuate people and were transferred to a safer place. In conclusion, I believe that current robotic technology can perform multiple tasks at the same time even
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 doesn’t even need a break. It has taken
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 of humans
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many areas yet these are not suitable for all occasions.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • hazardous environments
  • personalized learning
  • job displacement
  • economic inequality
  • social unrest
  • privacy concerns
  • surveillance capabilities
  • malfunction
  • reliance
  • technical failures
  • human skills
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