One of the consequences of improved technology is that many jobs that used to be done by people can now be completed by robots or computers. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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The rapid advance of technology now allows
computers
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and
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to perform tasks that
previously
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carried out by people and
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, generates inevitable threats to those professions. People are divided in opinion about whether the advantages of
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phenomenon exceed the disadvantages.
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essay will show that the positive impacts do not surpass the setbacks
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a couple of reasons. The
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reason to highlight is that
robots
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and
computers
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cannot deliberately adapt to unparalleled situations
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in most jobs.
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robots
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and
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excellent
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and efficient job, they can do it because they have a series of steps that
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planted
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their
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. When the
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cannot recognise a new situation or new problem, the
system
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cannot perform the job since the steps to handle the situation did not set before. The
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argument to notice is that
computers
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and
robots
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enormously rely on electricity. The mass use of
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and
robots
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will be likely to give a large amount of burden
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electrical
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the electrical
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. Sometimes, it cannot
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the need
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power, and
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it
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triggers
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technical
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or even worse, a blackout. To illustrate, if
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happens, it will stop the work of
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and
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.
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, a lot of services
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to be stopped, and the
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will be paralysed. In conclusion, the advantages of
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the use of
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and
computers
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to replace
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cannot surpass the disadvantages.
Robots
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and
computers
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are only able to perform tasks that
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been set before, and they rely entirely on
electrical
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the electrical
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system
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which
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will stop working if there is
problem
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a problem
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with the electrical
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