Some people believe that rich countries should provide poorer countries with other types of help rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The imbalance of development in various
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and regions is an issue that has been notably recognized by the general public. Some people think that developed nations ought to assist the developing ones with a range of aids,
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support, educational resources and investment consultancy, rather than only giving away money. Overall, I think their view is relatively rational and I totally agree with them.
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with, it is a fact that developed regions have successfully boosted their productivity and maintained self-sufficiency by improving their technology and the level of education of their citizens in a myriad of
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since hundreds of years ago.
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in the long run, mastering advanced technologies and having well-educated workforce members play vital roles and will give them the edge in intense global
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. Admittedly, receiving international monetary support is a direct approach to
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urgent problems in certain circumstances.
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, it is more fundamental for indigent economies to upgrade the industrial technology and educational quality in order to cultivate their soil for future prosperity.
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, the ultimate goal of assisting regions in poverty is to lessen the imbalance among all
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and to promote the living standard of human beings as a whole. And
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, given the blatant corruption seen in many
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in poverty impoverished nations, particularly those yet controlled by military force and authoritarian government, we cannot it cannot be guaranteed that international aid money will be
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into those intended needy recipients. Often, global cash aids are misused by unscrupulous entities, who only prioritize their selfish interests. Giving a country other aid,
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, access to educational resources, rather than cash can relatively avoid
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misuse and genuinely be helpful for ordinary ones living there to learn and that country to grow. In conclusion, I would strongly suggest
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affluent economies
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offer a wider range of
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as that can be a more critical and effective way of supporting both the country and its citizens in the long term.
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