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International community should act immediately to reduce all countries consumption of fuels such as gas and oil. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I partly agree. In my opinion, I agree with the consumption of fuel should be reduced in some nations, but I disagree that all
countries
 should reduce their consumption immediately. It depends on the abilities and situations of different areas. Some nations are able to replace fossil fuel with clean
energy
, including solar power, wave
energy
 or even nuclear power. Decreasing the use of oil,
gas
, or coal could solve several global climate problems.
Firstly
, the reduction of using oil could decline air pollution since emissions from cars become lower.
Secondly
, using substantial amounts of
gas
 and coal could speed up global warming. With the thermal
energy
 being decreased, the global warming issue could get some relief.
However
, a reduction of consuming fuels could be helpful for people to live in a better environment but some
countries
 need to use these powers with no choice. It might be difficult to apply new
energy
. If a country is in extremely cold conditions, it is a challenge to use wind turbines or solar panels to gain electricity from wind and heat
energy
 from the sun. In
this
 situation,
gas
 and coal could be the stable fuels that provide warmth and electricity to the country. In conclusion, I partly agree with the decline in
countries
’ fuel consumption, it will be beneficial for global climate issues. I disagree about all
countries
 need to immediately reduce the usage of
gas
, coal and oil.
That is
 because not all
countries
 have the ability to stop using fossil fuels.
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