More and more couples are deciding to be "child-free", to have no children, in other words. Some people claim that those couples reach this conclusion through entirely selfish reasons. While others think that they came to this decision through noble motives, such as concern about overpopulation and desire for independence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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couple

to either have a

kid

or not has

been

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widely stirred up

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controversy in several countries. Both sides of

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will be discussed in

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married

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without kids mainly due to financial-related

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a child,

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cost huge financial investments as all

parents

aim to

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only the best thing to their loves.

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been bombarded in several countries

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in Asia

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a premium detergent brand that specifically

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student uniform as if it is newly bought at all times because the whiter the uniform

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, the higher self-esteem of being the good mom she gains. In consequence, to be

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parents

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couple

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should plan ahead.

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should have a

kid

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the future workforce of the country. Right now, there are many countries facing the

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society issue as the numbers of elder outgrowth

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generation population.

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industries as there is no young generation to replace those who reaching retire stage. As so, the workforce market cannot produce the outcome as high as it should

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elder replacing workforce in the future.

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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295 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

voluntary childlessness
socio-economic factors
sustainable lifestyle
personal fulfillment
societal stigma
long-term implications
cultural influences
emotional autonomy
environmental sustainability
demographic shift
financial independence
ethical considerations
social consciousness
quality of life
reproductive choices
overpopulation concerns
self-actualization
lifestyle choice

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