IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

The system used for rubbish collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbors. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter ... 1.Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly 2.. Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours 3.Suggest what should be done about the problem

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are doing amazing in your life. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about the garbage problem we are facing in our area.
Firstly
, In our area, we are having trouble with the mismanagement of the rubbish collectors because they are not collecting the trash from time to time.
However
, they have skipped the trash twice in the
last
 two weeks and I have already written a letter to the local council about the trouble but they have not improved their system.
Furthermore
, these circumstances are giving us a hard time because the garbage in the bins is smelling and getting worse day by day.
Also
, we do have not any other empty bins to put the rest of the trash so It's really getting bad and making our place and the neighbourhood scent poor. We
as well as
 our neighbours are very upset about
this
 kind of behaviour from the workers of rubbish collection. I would like you should take some measures to solve our problem and hire those kinds of staff members who are willing to do their job with honesty and be more responsible toward their work.
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task achievement
You have provided a clear description of how the rubbish collection system is not working properly and explained how it is affecting you and your neighbors. However, the flow can be improved by clearly structuring each paragraph to address each point in the prompt distinctly.
coherence cohesion
The connection between ideas is generally clear, but the logical structure would benefit from more cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs. Consider using conjunctions and linking phrases to enhance the flow.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately polite and respectful, setting a positive tone for the letter.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph contains a single idea, which helps in maintaining clarity and focus.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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