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Traffic jams are a problem for individuals to use roads freely in major cities. What problems does it have for individuals? How individuals can reduce traffic?

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In today's contemporary world, the
usage
 of
vehicles
 has increased. For individuals using roads freely in major
cities
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traffic
jams
 are a huge problem.
This
 essay intends to look at why the measures have always fallen short of the mark, and suggest some solutions to migrate the problem. The
first
 reason why the measures have failed is that the developed city's population is increasing every day. Due to the increase in ,population the amount of vehicle
usage
 is
also
 increasing, which leads to huge gridlock on roads. Heavy
traffic
jams
 affect individuals' life, for ,example due to the
traffic
jams
 the individual can't reach their destination on time.
Traffic
jams
also
 cause driving risks, frequent accidents cause more delays in
traffic
 and sometimes
it
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they
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cause
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causes
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 death. The
second
 major reason for
traffic
jams
 is because
of
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lack of carpool
usage
.
People
 in cities
use
 more individual
vehicles
 than public
transport
. In ,cities the
usage
 of public
transport
 is decreased because of time delays in the arrival of public
vehicles
. If public
transport
usage
 increases it reduces the
amount
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number
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 of
vehicles
 in the
traffic
. It not only benefits
traffic
 it
also
 helps to reduce the pollution caused by
vehicles
.
finally
, The government have to promote the importance of
the
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apply
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carpooling and make
people
to
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apply
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use
 public
transport
.
Strict
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The strict
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 schedule has to be followed by the Public
vechicles
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vehicles
 in order to attract
people
 to
use
the
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apply
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public
transport
. To sum up, it can be seen clearly, public
transport
 is the need of the day, but many
people
 do not
use
 public
transport
 for various
reason
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reasons
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 given above, effective steps could be taken to encourage
people
 to reduce
traffic
jams
.
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