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Traffic jams are a problem for individuals to use roads freely in major cities. What problems does it have for individuals? How individuals can reduce traffic?

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In today's contemporary world, the
usage
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 of
vehicles
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 has increased. For individuals using roads freely in major
cities
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traffic
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jams
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 are a huge problem.
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 essay intends to look at why the measures have always fallen short of the mark, and suggest some solutions to migrate the problem. The
first
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 reason why the measures have failed is that the developed city's population is increasing every day. Due to the increase in ,population the amount of vehicle
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 is
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 increasing, which leads to huge gridlock on roads. Heavy
traffic
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jams
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 affect individuals' life, for ,example due to the
traffic
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jams
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 the individual can't reach their destination on time.
Traffic
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jams
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 cause driving risks, frequent accidents cause more delays in
traffic
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 and sometimes
it
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cause
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 death. The
second
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 major reason for
traffic
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jams
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 is because
of
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apply
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lack of carpool
usage
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.
People
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 in cities
use
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 more individual
vehicles
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 than public
transport
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. In ,cities the
usage
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 of public
transport
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 is decreased because of time delays in the arrival of public
vehicles
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. If public
transport
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usage
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 increases it reduces the
amount
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 of
vehicles
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 in the
traffic
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. It not only benefits
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 it
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 helps to reduce the pollution caused by
vehicles
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.
finally
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, The government have to promote the importance of
the
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apply
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carpooling and make
people
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to
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use
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 public
transport
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.
Strict
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The strict
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 schedule has to be followed by the Public
vechicles
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vehicles
 in order to attract
people
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 to
use
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the
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public
transport
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. To sum up, it can be seen clearly, public
transport
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 is the need of the day, but many
people
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 do not
use
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 public
transport
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 for various
reason
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 given above, effective steps could be taken to encourage
people
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 to reduce
traffic
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jams
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.
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