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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
To express our ideas and to communicate with others we need a
language
. English is considered
as
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the universal
language
 and is used in most
of
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the
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countries around the globe. But there are several nations
who
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 do not prefer to
use
 English,
such
 as China and Japan. If one travels to these countries, there will be many difficulties one has to face
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. The main problem that will arise when there is a
language
 barrier is
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 the difficulty in using public services. Signs and notices, purchasing tickets, selecting public transport and when to get on and get down a bus, all these simple tasks will be an issue. And since it's difficult to communicate with
neighbors
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, colleagues,
co-workers
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 ,we will be socially isolated.
In addition
, kids who are schooling will find it hard to follow their lessons.
However
, there are many solutions to overcome the
language
barriers
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. In most
of
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the
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countries, It is common to have
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ticket counters with options to select multiple languages. And
use
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 of Google
translator
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 on your mobile phone will be a
life saver
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 when facing difficulty in communication with foreigners.
Moreover
, most of the
officers
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 banks etcetera have their own translators who will help with people with different
language
 backgrounds. So, to sum up, I agree that
life
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 in a place that
use
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 a foreign
language
 can cause many social and practical problems.
Nevertheless
, in the modern world, there are many solutions that you can
use
 to make these problems easier.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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