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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT EVENTUALLY ALL JOBS WILL BE DONE BY ARTIFICIALLY INTELLIGENT ROBOTS. WHAT IS YOUR OPINION?

#people #jobs #robots
Nowadays, It is
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quite
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common
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jobs
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,
which
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are being done by artificially intelligent
robots
 around the globe, and it is one of the best
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 to accomplish most activities without any dependency.
To begin
 with, some intellectuals ascertain that all jobs across the world
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is
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 done by
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robots
 due to various reasons.
Firstly
, the robotic machines will deliver not only
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vast production but
also
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.
Consequently
,
majority
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 of companies have adopted
the
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robotic
technology
 to improve
quality
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 of
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their product
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product
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products
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.
Secondly
, with the aid of
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artificial
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intelligence
intellegence
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 most
industries
 have decided to increase the production to
maximum
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 level.
Thirdly
, there is no dependency on human
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interference
 which will reduce the
less
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cost to the management indeed.
Further
, the main reason behind people incorporating robotics into any
industries
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industry
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,
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 is less
maintainence
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maintenance
 cost and more profit
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 less time because of its swift performance.
For instance
, most developed countries have already implemented
this
 advanced machine
technology
 into their organizations in order to reach the demand across the universe.
On the other hand
, others will oppose that there are some problems which are associated with advanced
artifical
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artificial
 robotic
technology
. The main problem is
this
 machine interference in
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industries
 will increase the chances of removing human count, and the
robots
 will occupy many places, where people used to work before. Indeed,
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robotic
technology
 will lead
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 unemployment eventually due to
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 precision work at any company. Another
probelm
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problem
 is
robots
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uninterrupted
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the uninterrupted
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 power supply, which is not possible
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 many companies due to power shortages. Indeed, some
acitvities
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activities
, which will be not done by
this
 robotic
technology
such
 as artistic and travel
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.
For instance
, most underdeveloped nations cannot depend upon
this
 artificial
technology
 due to limited electricity and natural gases. To summarize,
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 my opinion, it is an irrefutable fact that
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the help of
artificial
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 intelligent
robots
 will take
industries
 to
next
 level.
However
, there are some limitations
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 need to be considered while using the
robots
.
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