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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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• In our modern life, online
education
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 has been developing almost every day and it is becoming extremely well-known. Few individuals mention that
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 of significant profits
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replace
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 soon. Others point out that traditional
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 is irreplaceable. I strongly believe that
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 traditional teaching is extremely beneficial for
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 • On the one hand, the majority of humans say that
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 there are a lot of beneficial aspects of
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, and it is worthwhile for
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 because if
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 study at school, they are able to ask something which they do not understand,
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students
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 can say about their problems on their
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 to their
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 without any difficulties, and their
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 try to solve their problems.
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, nowadays I am preparing
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 exam and I study
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 I am able to say my problems to my tutor.
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 as I can not speak English,
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 I told him about it, and He gives me some advice and solve my problem. •
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, other people say that
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 there are a lot of profits of
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 because if
students
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 learn something through the internet, they are able to save time and they can take
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 every moment which they want. They do not spend their time
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 to college or courses.
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 they can take
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education
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 from foreign
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 without challenges.
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 my best friend is learning
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 language from native English
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 through the internet. It is one of the best
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 to take high-quality
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. • In conclusion, nowadays many
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 prefer studying
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the
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online courses
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 it is extremely worthwhile for them.
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 others say that
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students
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 should be taken
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 at school. I think
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education
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 is very important for
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-Learning
  • face-to-face education
  • remote learning
  • virtual classroom
  • webinar
  • digital platform
  • self-paced learning
  • interactive learning
  • course accessibility
  • academic networking
  • pedagogy
  • synchronous/asynchronous sessions
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • edtech (educational technology)
  • holistic development
  • practical skills
  • collaborative learning
  • digital divide
  • curriculum adaptation
  • technological literacy
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