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Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school, are more influential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

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In many regions of the world, some
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 believe
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 is undoubtedly advantageous for experiences we through before attended to
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 more seriously. While others concur that experiences in the teenage period of time, especially at
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, are more influential. In
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 essay, I will elaborate on both sides and state what I think. Those who believe that many
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 we learn when we were as a
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 may have several arguments. They may well argue that the age when we were a kid that the period of time we have creative thinking and idea.
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 is because a
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 they did not suck in many rules, laws, theories, or formulas, and everything they do steps out of the influence of the universe, and they make a contrast with it.
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, we sometimes saw that children were really creative and crazy.
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, many experiences when we were a
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 doing many crazy things,
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make an important contribution to our life later, special for some
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 who
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 in
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 Director of Trinh Cong Son's life, according to her interview, she said that becoming a successful
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 director came from simple things that she tried living as a kid, doing
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 exactly the same as what she had done when she was a
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.
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, the fact that something we have learned when we still studying at
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 is necessary for several reasons. Chief among these is that at
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 we can learn many practical
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work
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 in a group, doing presentations, focusing, and solve problems and communicating with friends. In high
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, working groups teach me a lot of things, sometimes we got into trouble in arguments or made a division of
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, and try to communicate, and listen to
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 who were strange to me.
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 can result in the fact that if we have well-prepared at
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 and when e step outside and face realistic
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 at the office, we will not get difficulties in practical
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. Countless real-life examples have shown that my cousin when still studying at university and high
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, has
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 talking in front of crowds and
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 the ability to persuade
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 via talking. After
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, by having a well-prepared before, he did not lose time learning and it makes him get easier with his marketing at the bank. In conclusion, experience in a
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 is as important as the knowledge and
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 we had learned at
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. Due to each thing, we learned from the different periods
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 necessary for our period of life and major what we do.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • future life
  • experiences
  • childhood development
  • bonding
  • socialization
  • peer interactions
  • basic skills
  • education
  • learning
  • friendships
  • independence
  • identity
  • exposure
  • new ideas
  • perspectives
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