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Some people believe that to become successful in sports one should have a natural talent. Others think that perseverance and practice are a crucial part to success. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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opinion
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 about whether a person must be gifted in order to succeed in sports or
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 key role is to be committed to regular practice. In
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 I will discuss both views and give my personal opinion
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about
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 traits make someone more ready for engaging in a special physical activity.
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, an individual with more flexibility in muscles is more likely to be successful in gymnastic or in a
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 program like basketball that requires someone to be taller than
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 of people,
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that is
 a genetic
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, there is nothing that cannot be improved with practice so
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 folks with less bodily readiness for some specific activities may need to take extra time to do some special
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. they can be guided by a nutrition specialist and trainer for having personalized diet and exercise
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 to work on their flaws. I personally believe that
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 what plays the main role in someone's ability to engage in different physical activities.
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