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Forests are the lungs of the earth. Destruction of the world’s forests amounts to death of the world we currently know. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that some companies complain about the poor interpersonal
skills
 of their new staff.
This
 essay will discuss the main reasons
of
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this
 trend and
then
 describe the possible solutions firms should adopt. As many new employees are school leavers, the causes of
this
 problem can be found in the home and in the school. A child’s personality is shaped during the formative years of
home-life
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 and schooling. In terms of the home, close-knit families are a thing of the past in many societies, and youngsters do not learn to live in harmony with one another and with their parents.
For example
, meal times used to be occasions when families ate together and discussed the tasks to be done and the problems of each family member. In school, children are encouraged to achieve individual excellence in exams, rather than to have social
skills
 and to be
team-players
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.
However
, in order to conduct
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business efficiently, firms must take steps to train new employees to acquire interpersonal
skills
.
Firstly
, cooperative
skills
 should be developed, making the most of the latest management techniques. Some companies in Europe and the USA,
for example
, organise challenging activity weekends during which staff must work as teams to do
mountain-climbing
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 or climbing and camping. Working together, their survival
skills
 are put to the test.
Secondly
, codes of conduct at work should be strictly enforced for both new and existing employees to facilitate communication and cooperation. In conclusion,
although
 some reasons can be suggested as probable causes of
this
 problem, there are measures which companies should take to develop the interpersonal
skills
 of new staff.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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