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Despite health warnings, a large number of people continue to smoke all over the world. Why should we be concerned about this? What solutions would you suggest?

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Addiction
 is a serious issue that affects the world. Many
people
 are addicted to cigarettes even if they know that it's harmful to their bodies. Numerous health groups are working to educate
people
 about the results of smoking. Like other addictions, cigarettes affect human health, psychology,
social
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and social
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 and economic situations in a bad way. Quitting
smoke
 might help
people
 in many ways. In
this
 essay, I'm going to mention possible solutions.
Firstly
, if
people
 could
smoke
 in only a few chosen smoking areas, others don't get affected. Because even if, one person
smoke
 in a room, it affects others too.
Also
, the bad smell stays there for a while. So, smoking should be allowed only in certain areas. It's important for any child must not allow entering these areas. The term ' passive smoker' means a person who doesn't
smoke
 but is affected by the
smoke
 in the environment.
This
 is harmful as smoking.
Also
,
children
 should be educated from an early age. If governments teach them it is a bad habit,
children
 don't tend to
smoke
 when they grow up. The best way to quit an
addiction
 is, never to start.
In addition
,
children
 mostly copy their parents. So, parents should understand to smoking in front of their
children
, could increase the potential of kids' smoking thoughts. In conclusion, there are some ways to avoid
addiction
. Smoking should be hard and
people
 should be tired while smoking.
On the other hand
,
children
 are society's future and we need to protect them from any kind of
addiction
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Addiction
  • Cardiovascular disease
  • Chronic obstructive pulmonary disease (COPD)
  • Nicotine
  • Public health initiative
  • Secondhand smoke
  • Substance abuse
  • Tobacco cessation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Social norms
  • Healthcare burden
  • Preventive measures
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