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Many customs and traditional ways of behaviors are no longer relevant to the modern life and no worth keeping. Do you agree or disagree?

#customs #behaviors #life
There are many
customs
 and traditional ways of
behaviors
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in my country but as compared to the past these behaviours are no longer relevant to
the
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modern
life
 and
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are no
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no
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not
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worth keeping. I disagree with
this
 statement. On the one hand,
customs
 and traditions are helpful to connect with the ancestors and old ones , these attitudes
also
helps
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population
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 to believe in god.
For instance
, if a person believes in procedure and tradition the person will celebrate so many festivals that happen in their country.
On the other hand
, Traditional and
habit
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habitual
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behaviour
 can
also
 become addictive and society believe in them without thinking as there are many rituals, traditions and
customs
 which are not good and folk trust
these
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behaviour
 blindly which might be harmful to them. In my opinion, modern
life
 has become more attentive and aware full of
customs
 and rituals as they
first
 think if these
behaviour
 are necessary and not harmful to them.There are many
customs
 and traditional
behaviour
 that requires so much expense
which
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 might not be necessary. To sum up, no modern
life
 has not for about custom and traditional
behaviour
 but
their
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they're
they are
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a
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way of seeing things have changed and people think traditional and custom behaviours are no longer relevant to modern
life
.
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