Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

There is an idea which is an

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upward

trend nowadays. Humanity investigates the

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way

to teach

children

to

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in a good

way

in

society

. They try to examine whether there must be a penalty system to show

children

what is correct.

First

of all, while we are talking about the systems we should always consider the limitation due to avoid

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down

the

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society

's values. Since the

begining

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beginning

of

1900s

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the 1900s

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,

humanbeing

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human being

human beings

,

and

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human dignity are protected by international regulations. With

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regards

regard

to

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the contract

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of international human

rights

, governments should respect

to

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people's

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honour

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while they regulate the constitution and local norms. So, the variety of penalties should be limited by

non physical

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activiets

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activists

activity

activities

. In

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, municipalities can find a

way

to include their local people's

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opinions

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while they give

a

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power to teachers about punishment

methodolgy

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methodology

. Obviously, teachers and families can utility from

children

's own

rights

to teach

children

whether a

behavior

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behaviour

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is acceptable

from

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by

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society

or not.

Children

should learn the possibility of being lack of some

rights

. If they act in a bad

way

than

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then

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they can not reach these

rights

for a while.

Furthermore

, teachers can give

a

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training to

children

about

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the enviroment

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enviroment

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environment

and other elements that all

society

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of society

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should know to be more

awareneses

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awareness

person. The most important part of the system is to establish a sustainable method to

countinue

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continue

this

for through the

next

decades. In conclusion,

personally

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I support the idea of

penalty

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penalties

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to create

more

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a more

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liveable and enjoyable

society

where all people respect

to

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apply

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other

individual's

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individuals'

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rights

.

However

, as I mentioned in the previous sentences

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if the tutors and family members lost their auto control and get a

poission

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position

poison

of power

,

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than

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then

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we can not control the system anymore.

That is

why it is so important to find out the best balance for

this

issue.