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The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

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During the
last
 decades, it has become evident how every day more and more
people
 all around the world share their taste in fashion and aesthetics in any kind of good of consumption.
However
, while it is known that human beings develop by copying other
people
 it is
also
 true that mass
media
 have had an impact on our current behaviour and elections. I will explain my thoughts on
this
 topic below.
First
 of all, human beings’ development in the
first
 stages is based on repetition. Namely, children learn by imitating their
parents'
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parents
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 or caregivers’ behaviours.
For instance
, the
first
 words of any baby are learnt because his parents have repeated them constantly until the baby can say them by himself. The same situation occurs with eating as some studies have demonstrated.
On the other hand
, mass
media
 and communications in the globalization era make
people
 more susceptible to being influenced by the fashion industry. Nowadays it is quite common to see on the internet
people
 from different cultures wearing similar clothes or decorating their homes with the same type of furniture. As a matter of fact, brands have colonized social
media
 and other communications means with ads that shape the way
people
 consume. In conclusion,
people
 learn their
first
 words and behaviours based on repeating them from their parents and caregivers’,
nevertheless
 in my opinion mass
media
 and the fashion industry have shaped the tastes, beliefs and habits of consumers all over the world and
as a result
,
people
 are copying one another more than ever before.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inherently social creatures
  • acceptance and validation
  • peer influence
  • fashion trends
  • consumer behavior
  • media influence
  • celebrities
  • social media platforms
  • trend adoption
  • mass production
  • fast fashion
  • accessibility
  • unique identity
  • mainstream trends
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