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In some countries, people prefer to rent a house than buy one. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a property?

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There is an ongoing discussion regarding
art
 and
science
.The
role
 of
science
, as well as
art
, plays an important
role
 in our lives. No one can deny the importance of
science
.
However
, the
role
 of musicians, artists, or painters is as important as the mountain's height.  The contribution of artists to the development of a country is remarkable.Actually,
art
 is a creative profession that makes people more innovative and inspires them to think outside the box.
Art
 is very essential to hammering out the sorrows of humans through eye-catching various colours. Another important aspect of vibrant
art
 is that it's a way to keep a culture alive.
Furthermore
, culture is the identity of a nation, which can be enhanced by
art
. 
On the other hand
, the
role
 of
science
 in our society is as crucial as oxygen.
In addition
, without advanced technology, people will suffer numerous problems.
For example
, nowadays humans can travel easily from one place to another as well as to other planets around the universe with the help of aeroplanes. Due to the fatigue of the whole day, you can easily make food within a few minutes.  As far as I am concerned, I can figure out how
science
 makes our lives better or easier. While
art
 teaches us to, how can you enjoy
this
 hard life? But when I cast my mind back, I realised
art
 is
also
 a source of mental relaxation. In the case of
science
, I am not satisfied because I firmly believe that it makes our lives better but cannot be helpful as a hobby.  In conclusion, from my standpoint, in order to make life more reliable,
science
 plays a major
role
.For the relaxation of the soul,
art
 is mandatory. In short, both have outraged advantages.
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