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The media has become too influential in people’s lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Media
 has been developed rapidly as the means of communication in
this
 world. In
this
 sophisticated era, many individuals argue that
media
 influences
people
's attitudes and results in negative development.
This
 essay will show my greater tendency to the positive impacts on the development of
media
 since
media
 allows the public to get and access
information
 easily.
To begin
,
Media
 can bring
information
 effectively to society effectively in a short time.
In other words
, the
media
 is the place for a lot of accounts to serve various news from around the world.
For instance
, on Twitter,
people
 can directly get trusted
information
 from authorities through a verified account.
Therefore
,
this
 kind of news can reach thousands of
people
 just in a
second
 and society can
also
 access it once the news has been published. On the one hand, the internet might give many positive impacts on individuals' lives.
Firstly
, there is a lot of
information
 available and it can be accessed freely.
Secondly
, it can improve the sense of convenience in reading
information
 since the internet now is on
people
's finger trip. The means of communication,
on the other hand
,
people
 can stay connected through social
media
 and help many
people
 to keep their good relationships.
as a result
, many
people
 might get positive changes in their life which
media
 brings. In conclusion,
although
 many societies believe that
media
 do not have benefits in
this
 current development, it is undeniable that
media
 play a pivotal role in terms of providing accessible and trustworthy
information
 and the effectiveness of
media
 communication.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influential
  • negative development
  • opinions
  • perceptions
  • unrealistic standards
  • ideals
  • manipulate
  • distort
  • information
  • addiction
  • dependency
  • privacy
  • valuable
  • entertainment
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