In some countries, health care and education are only partially funded by the government. Which do you think is better in terms of quality: free public healthcare and education or privately paid health care and education?

A number of countries
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not spend
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money for medical enmities and educational activities
such
as building school or funding
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of students fully, due to the fact that
government
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has expected
from
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citizens to pay all of these
expences
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.
Although
it has been argued by some
people
that
this
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enables better services in terms of quality, I definitely disagree with their opinions because I believe that states should provide health care and education costs
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community
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by ensuring qualified staff and
places
.
To begin
with, one
one
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can deny that the governments have to take care of all needs of
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people
who have lived
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country, which involve medical and educational demands.
For example
, citizens have deserved to live
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best conditions as much as possible, which comprise all of the
communtiy
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community
,
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be looked after by their rulers. In fact,
this
opportunity must be
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human right and if an ordinary person pays his taxes, can estimate various services from
state
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a state
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with the best
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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.
Therefore
, the government has to apply different public
aplications
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applications
with
sofisticated
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sophisticated
tools regardless cost of them.
On the other hand
, it has been known that
private
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sector has applied better conditions in terms of various aspects than public services
such
as
quality
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the quality
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of buildings and devices which have been used for treatment. To illustrate, if we consider an ordinary student who has gone to
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collage
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college
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to study, he would encounter
places
and tools which are built
low
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quality,
wheras
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whereas
a private university provides different options.
In other words
,
people
who have taken
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class
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classes
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from private
college
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colleges
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not only come across
sofisticated
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sophisticated
places
,
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but
also
they have
recieved
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received
better
aproaches
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approaches
. Yet, leaving all these public sectors to businessmen might create different problems in terms of
inequalty
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inequality
equality
. To sum up, it is fact that private facilities supply better options to
people
than state enmities.
However
, it is not mean that all
places
should be
rulled
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ruled
by
private
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field
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. It seems to me that governments should take care of their citizens by ensuring the best conditions.
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