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Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly Between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#countries #women #time #jobs #household #tasks #men
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 gap is now disappeared in
the
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society, so
females
 are doing
full time
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full-time
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 jobs and it is appropriate to
shared
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share
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 household
works
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work
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 between men and women. I agree
with
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large
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a large
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 extent with
this
 prompt and
also
 share other viewpoints as well. To commence with,
gender
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the gender
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 gap is still gone and
females
 participate in
full time
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full-time
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 jobs and contribute their salary to their homes.To be more
precisely
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, due to education and
internet
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the internet
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womens
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women
 are aware
about
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of
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 their rights and want to share their income to
family
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the family
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. Apart from
this
females
 are
induls
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indulge
indulges
 in every field so they are busy in their
work
 resultingly
this
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there
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their
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 husbands
are do
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do
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 householders which
gives
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 them relief from household
work
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, for example,
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for example
jassina
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jasmine
Cassina
 urine day New Zealand's prime minister his husband to parental leaves when she
blessed
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was blessed
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 with
baby
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a baby
the baby
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 child has
this
 is logical to share
work
 with man and woman.
However
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 some people think traditionally that it is not logical to divide women's
work
 with
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men's
mens
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men
 these are orthodox people so they think household chords are only
females
 duty and their responsibility
additionally
men's
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men
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 are responsible for earning and outside
work
for instance
 according to a survey of India 80% of
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women
women's
womens
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women
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indals
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modals
indels
models
 with
house
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the house
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 and their educated To sum
up
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 all the duty of
house
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the house
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 of chords is women but
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men
mens
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men
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 are equally responsible for
it
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them
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 do not overlook men's duty
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