You and your family are living in rented accommadation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with rhe condition of some of the furniture.

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Dear
madam
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, I hope you doing great. I am
tenant
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a tenant
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in
one
of your
accomadation
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accommodation
. I am writing
this
letter to bring your attention to some of
unable
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the unable
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furniture as a part of the rental arrgentment. I am hoping that you could fix or replace them with the new
one
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. I live in your apartment
last
four months.
At
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the beginning,we are
extremly
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extremely
satisfied and happy when we moved
to
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into
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the apartment but
unfortunatily
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unfortunately
fortunately
we found some of
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the furnitures
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furnitures
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furniture
are out of date.
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, the air condition has noisy sounds and water is leaking since we have lived.
Also
, the fridge does not maintain
normal
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a normal
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temperature and
this
is
reason
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the reason
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why our food turned bad
quikly
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quickly
.
One
more thing, the dinner table leg
and
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has some broken. I hope you will look into the matter and give me an immediate reply. I think the best way to solve the problem is to replace it with a better
one
. Sincerely Rustamova Laylo
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