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Some people think that individuals who make a lot of money are most successful. Other think that those who contribute to society like teachers and scientists are most successful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A lot of students trying to settle abroad after graduation for
work
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 and experience. There are those who believe that professionals must
work
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 in the
country
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 where they trained,
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, opponents which are supporting the idea
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of
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 living and working in different
countries
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 based on
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 priorities. The latter idea makes sense in terms of economic conditions and living standards.
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, being educated and working in the same
country
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 ease to perform the responsibilities.
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, in Kazakhstan, students are getting familiar with professional lives in a university by doing an internship.
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, most
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 offer free education from school to university.
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, when professional people
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 in their
countries
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 they can easily be part of a society, without losing
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economical power.
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, students or professionals who settle abroad have better opportunities to grow in the future. Every professional or student must do their best to survive in
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another country
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country
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 a result, they become successful and paid well.
This
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 situation can improve self-development skills way faster than homeland. Indeed,
such
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 conditions fit very well to
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the younger
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 generation and promote them to move to developed
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. In conclusion, there is a dilemma whether qualified people should
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 in the
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 they trained
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 they can move to another
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 if they want. In my own opinion, people have the freedom to choose the place they live because of
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the reasons
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 written above.
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