Some people think that individuals who make a lot of money are most successful. Other think that those who contribute to society like teachers and scientists are most successful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

A lot of students trying to settle abroad after graduation for
work
and experience. There are those who believe that professionals must
work
in the
country
where they trained,
however
, opponents which are supporting the idea
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living and working in different
countries
based on
individual’s
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priorities. The latter idea makes sense in terms of economic conditions and living standards.
On the other hand
, being educated and working in the same
country
ease to perform the responsibilities.
For instance
, in Kazakhstan, students are getting familiar with professional lives in a university by doing an internship.
In addition
, most
countries
offer free education from school to university.
In other words
, when professional people
work
in their
countries
they can easily be part of a society, without losing
an
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economical power.
On the other hand
, students or professionals who settle abroad have better opportunities to grow in the future. Every professional or student must do their best to survive in
other
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country
,
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a result, they become successful and paid well.
This
situation can improve self-development skills way faster than homeland. Indeed,
such
conditions fit very well to
younger
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generation and promote them to move to developed
countries
. In conclusion, there is a dilemma whether qualified people should
work
in the
country
they trained
or
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they can move to another
country
if they want. In my own opinion, people have the freedom to choose the place they live because of
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written above.
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