In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In some countries the ownership of peoples'

home

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important matter.In these countries is very important to own your own

home

rather than

renting

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it. It might be indifferent

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some, but

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these people it

matter

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. Why is that the case? you might wonder .I think it is because your

home

is supposed to be exactly what it sounds like, your

home

. As a

human

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I think we long after having

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to call our own doesn'

matter what it is, but humans will always want to claim ownership.

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is nothing new and it has been like

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, like colonies

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, which later once again became the same country as before

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by its own inhabitants. People will always want to be the

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to decide what happens to them and when you rent your

home

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it without the

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permission, If you as a person are renting an apartment there might be a lot of stressors in your life. A scratched wall can cause you a major headache

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because the wall was not yours. The bedroom you are currently sleeping in might not be available as long as you hope, things happen in life and maybe the

landlord won'

want to have you as a tenant to your mortgage,

home

take could loans the be or a

house

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awful crashing comes lot of or to

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money

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natural on finance. buying disaster As In

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, not owning renter you

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have to pay

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property. You wouldn'

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about destroying your expensive

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line, a

human

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feel like We need to have D

home

and calling it your own can make that more special. personally would rather own my house, because

then

whatever happens it is on me and no one else.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
28Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

322 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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ownership
renting
importance
sense of security
stability
financial investment
asset
customize
decorate
belonging
community
potential
future generations
long-term
cost advantage
control
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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Task 2: What can be done to maintain biodiversity?

Write a letter to the hotel, making the arrangements. In your letter •tell them when you will be arriving and leaving •explain what type of rooms you would like, and ask how much the weekend will cost •ask about activities and places of interest near the hotel

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people believe that schoolchildren should do their class work individually. Other people believe that sometimes class work should be done in small groups. Discuss both views and give your opinion.