inspite of new advances made in the agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

In the modern
world
, agriculture is a
fast developing
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field.
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of new technology has improved the quality of seeds and plants which has led to good harvests.
in addition
, new methods of storing and delivering have increased the availability of the products. Despite all these, unfortunately, people in some parts of the
world
still suffer from hunger. There are many reasons for the unavailability of
food
in some
countries
. One is the unequal distribution of
food
throughout the
world
.
For example
, developed
countries
produce large amounts of wheat per year but they do not share the excess amount with other
countries
as they want to keep the market value high. Another reason is the limited resources
such
as water and good weather which make it impossible to continue growing plants.
Moreover
, in some
countries
, people do not have the new technology to have good crops and
also
the younger generation has abandoned the field of agriculture to seek better jobs. one possible solution to overcome the
above mentioned
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issues is that
,
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the affected
countries
need to analyze and identify
their
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issues which cause hunger and try to solve them.
For example
, areas with poor weather conditions can identify the crops that a suitable for their region and grow them. Another successful option is looking for different
food
sources
such
as meat and fish.
Furthermore
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the
world
can help these nations by sharing their excess
food
, new technology and knowledge. In conclusion, though part of the
world
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population
suffer
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from
inadequate
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the inadequate
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food
supply, there are many options available to overcome
this
problem.
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Example:

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