Some people believe that engaging in an active pastime does more to develop childrens' life skills than time spent reading. To what extent do ypu agree or disagree?

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the superiority of active occupations over reading in the sense of better influence on a child’s character. Personally, I am inclined to believe that there should not be a strong distinction between these two determinations, as they both are necessary and play an essential role in
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of a young personality. Regarding the activities, among which are different sports, both indoor and outdoor ones, and extra classes,
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chess, music or art, they all possess a certain set of qualities which cultivate in children particular traits. These features are essential for socialization and adaptation in the world.
For instance
, undertaking
such
sport as tennis helps to train an important analytical
way
of thinking, by anticipating the possible strategy of calculating the trajectory of hitting the ball in
such
a
way
that the opponent is exhausted and misses it. What is more, any type of sport cultivates willpower in children, which teaches them not to give up and use all
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aspiring the final goal. As for spending time on reading, it is
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one of the crucial aspects of life, which takes part in balanced development. Not only is a child physically
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educated, but
also
has a wide outlook. Reading scientific articles and student books helps to perceive and analyze new information, accumulate knowledge, and broaden the field of
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. Belletristic, fiction and magazines facilitate the creative,
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way
of thinking. An erudite person is able to maintain a dialogue on any topic and find an approach to any person, as well as
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out of any possible situation. To conclude, there is a broad array of life skills and their advancement requires different methods.
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, it is a multifaceted process which considers active occupations, as well as mental ones.
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