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Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses.To what extend you agree or disagree?

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It has been
argues
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 that rather than constructing new buildings, people should
priorotize
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prioritise
trees
, and allocate lands that are located within the cities to their
plantation
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plantations
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. Convinced that planting
trees
 is crucial, and can benefit both,
environment
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the environment
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 and its habitants, I tend to agree with
this
 statement. One obvious reason to argue in
favor
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 of creating more green spaces in towns
,
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 is that they would have a positive effect on the environment. Not only do
trees
 clean the air, producing a considerable amount of oxygen, but
also
 help humankind to deal with some global issues. To illustrate, being able to omit carbon dioxide, which is considered to be a trigger of global warming, from the atmosphere,
they
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can mitigate the impact of
the
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climate change, and ,if not prevent, at least delay it.
Furthermore
, it is essential to have diverse flora in urban areas, where various constructing and developing works are constantly carried out, as
trees
 have
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a
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 capacity to reduce unwanted noises, produced by machinery used for building purposes. As a consequence, people would be less exposed to
the
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noise pollution, which can
also
 be reflected
on
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the
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 general well-being.
In addition
, territories surrounded by various plants
are tend
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 to be more appealing to the citizens.
Therefore
, if developers ensure that there are enough
trees
 in the vicinity of the premises that they offer, they will have
a higher chances
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 of attracting customers. To recapitulate, I believe that more
trees
 should be planted in the cities, given their ability to generate fresh air,
contribution
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 to
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 and potential to increase housing sales.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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