More and more people today are moving from the countryside . Why is this happening? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development ?

In recent times, people are migrating from small towns to metropolitan cities for manifold reasons. Better job opportunities and availability of
facilities
are the significant
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which is expanding rapidly. I believe
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is
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positive development for
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individuals and for
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nations which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, most
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youngsters are more inclined towards urban
areas
in order to have immense career growth. As small towns do not have different job possibilities as per their respective careers. Due to
this
, they tend to withstand there with low wages.
For instance
, in 2020, during the economic crisis in India where financial losses were high, people from rural
areas
were migrating to cities in contemplation of earning
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income.
Therefore
, by getting
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professional advancements in
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, one
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to move towards big cities to get
better
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education.
Furthermore
, in
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, communities do not have proper public
facilities
such
as hospitals, schools, transport and many more. Due to
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, parents
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migrated from small towns to urban
areas
with a view to save child's future. To cite an example, many individuals
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moved to Norway as it has the highest medical
facilities
and universities so that they can have access to
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healthcare
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and superior schooling.
Hence
, they are likely to
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settled
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in different nations. To conclude,
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of citizens from remote
areas
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suburb
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is an optimistic step providing
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plenty of career options for students. Substantially,
this
phenomenon is a good step for
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generation to get appropriate healthcare
facilities
.
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