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The bar chart compares three museums in terms of the overall number of annual visitors
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visited between 2007 and 2012. It is clear that the National Gallery was the most successful
museum
of the other three as of 2012. It is
also
noticeable that the Victoria and Albert
Museum
was the winner at the beginning of the period. During the five years of statistics, the quantity of annual visitors to the National Gallery has basically increased year by year. In 2012,
this
number surpassed 15
million
for the
first
time which is ahead of the other two. On closer inspection, annual attendance at the British
Museum
fell sharply in 2008, to around 6
million
, and has risen every year since.
In addition
, the Victoria and Albert
Museum
's annual visitor numbers reached their lowest point in 2010, about 6
million
. In 2009, the annual visitor volume of the three museums was not high, not more than 10
million
, but in 2012, the number of visitors basically reached 10
million
.
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